It always looked suspicious. Every morning as we ran by I longed to know its story. Who owned it? Do they still live here? Why has they’re fence gone? Well today I’m going to answer those questions. I get to the house and knock on the door and wait… No answer…Still no answer, so I go around the house and look through the broken glass, as I walk around the house, I see that everything is empty, so I keep on walking around the house. Then see something that changes everything, a sign that says, “For Sale?”
Hi Lucas – great job!
I love the mysteriousness of your story. Your use of rhetorical questions adds to the tension and brings the reader along with you. I also like your use of ellipses (i.e., …) because it slows down the flow of the story allowing the reader to savour suspense!
Awesome job – keep on writing!
Ed Team100 WC
Guernsey, Channel Islands.